Hey Natasha, I have to admit I really, really liked your work, of course it's better than mine so far. Next time you could go into more detail about certain things such as digging the grave, what the corpse looked like, etc, etc. Overall great work.
Ayyyy Natasha, I heart it. >:) Anywayz the story explains a lot of texture like how u said when I stepped the land it felt like the wave of relief.... like u srs XD
I loved how u put so much work into this story good job, keep up the good work in the future and keep writing things like these because I would love to read more :) It's really good and fresh, you plz do more things like these because I am interested!! Full stop.
O im very sorry but u have to improve on shortening ur story but making us think its a long story if u know wut Im saying. Its okay to do it that long bcuz people are quite interested in it but for me I feel like its boring to read long stories not being negative or anything but plz maybe next time :)
Hello Natasha, Nice Work. I like how you put different dates as your heading to start your new idea.
ReplyDeleteThanks Xij :)
DeleteHey Natasha, I have to admit I really, really liked your work, of course it's better than mine so far. Next time you could go into more detail about certain things such as digging the grave, what the corpse looked like, etc, etc. Overall great work.
ReplyDeleteThanks, I'll take that into consideration :)
DeleteAyyyy Natasha, I heart it. >:)
ReplyDeleteAnywayz the story explains a lot of texture like how u said when I stepped the land it felt like the wave of relief.... like u srs XD
I loved how u put so much work into this story good job, keep up the good work in the future and keep writing things like these because I would love to read more :) It's really good and fresh, you plz do more things like these because I am interested!! Full stop.
ReplyDeleteHello Natasha! I really liked how you used your words and how you described your surroundings. I look forward to knowing more about your character.
ReplyDeleteO im very sorry but u have to improve on shortening ur story but making us think its a long story if u know wut Im saying.
ReplyDeleteIts okay to do it that long bcuz people are quite interested in it but for me I feel like its boring to read long stories not being negative or anything but plz maybe next time :)